Feeling Strange

I think you balanced the internal character and the physical character and their voices well in this story. I like that the main character was able to have a voice outside of their emotion because that allows more creativity in emotion although the person is assigned one.

The opening paragraph of this story really worked for me — you presented us with the basic premise which is a fascinating and hilarious one, and it made it easy for the reader to buy into that as the story continues.

The lack of structure in this writing caused a looming feeling of mystery and suspense over the storyline. I enjoyed the story itself and felt that the classic main character focus resulted in a simple light-hearted read, until the climax in the last paragraph. Good job.

The idea to this story was extremely interesting, especially when getting to know how it affects the world, and how hectic things are when meeting new people with the emotions personified. When characters spoke, though, there were no indents, and it stayed one paragraph. The straightforward storytelling made things less interesting, because a lot of what you had your main character say could've definitely been told through actually showing events in the story that showed this. Telling me straight up everything about the world and the characters IN the story was degrading to the story, especially since you had such a great concept. I do like how you were able to show to readers how this world of emotions as pets to each human affects people. and even if it is only shown in two settings, we still get a sense of how different things are from our real world, along with the similarities. I like how even though animal emotions as pets seems outlandish you still were able to show the similarities of how these pet emotions are and how human brains think, like when Emily's wolf was listing the bad things that could happen when going to school.

This story has a very clear beginning and middle and end. With each new paragraph, we get to know the setting and characters more deeply. I think this is a nice pace but yet not to fast so that it becomes confusing.

You had a very original idea, and I think that you were trying to build up your idea in the world which you did very successfully. It made lots of sense and you did a good job creating an interesting conflict. It made me think about how emotions conflict in the real world. Maybe you could have had her emotion change as she learned to control it!

I think this was a really cool and intriguing idea. I love how everyone has their own animal based upon which emotion they feel, best represents them. It makes me think about which emotion is my most defined trait, and which animal it would be. Love the ideas you put down, great job!